LÀM SAO ĐỂ NÂNG ĐIỂM BÀI ESSAY TỪ BAND 6.0 LÊN BAND 9.0 ?

Hôm nay, chúng ta sẽ cùng tìm hiểu, so sánh và nhận ra sự khác biệt giữa hai bài writing task 2 – dạng Discuss both views and give your opinion. Từ đó các bạn có thể rút ra được kinh nghiệm cho bản thân giúp nâng điểm bài viết essay của mình từ band 6.0 lên band 9.0 nhé.

Ngoài ra các bạn có thể tham khảo một số bài mẫu writing cùng với những topic khác nhé.

 

TOPIC: Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. However, others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

 Discuss both views and give your opinion.

 

Essay sample – band 6.0

 

Some argue that people’s lives are happiest when we are teenagers, while others believe that adulthood brings more happiness although there are greater responsibilities. In my opinion, I believe that young people’s lives are happier than adults.

 

First of all, from an economic point of view, teenagers are not aware about the conditions that exist in daily life. For instance, most teens do not know the facts that affect the economy such as oil prices. Secondly, although it is very common that young people do some jobs in present times, most teenagers do not have financial responsibilities like renting or housing costs owing to their parents paying for these costs.

 

Another good reason to state that teenage years are the best times in our lives is that during school, young students are focused mainly on the academics. Consequently, teens live their lives in a happy scenario in which the connected activities like sporting endeavors, music festivals and even scientific competitions represent the daily duties.

 

From a social perspective, teenagers do not fear social concepts or discrimination. As a result, they live freely, in whatever way they want. For example, most teens are involved in sport activities, and voluntary organizations as well. Those relationships are undoubtedly very common among young people rather than adults.

 

In conclusion, teenage years are the happiest for most people due to the activities they normally do. There are not worried about current affairs like oil markets or political situations. In addition, school times are very important because the positive influence that it has in young’s lives.

 

Essay sample – band 9.0

 

It is often argued that the most fulfilling stage of a person’s life is during adolescence, while others believe that adulthood, despite things like a job, family and money concerns, is better. This essay agrees with the former, rather than the latter view. It will first discuss how grown-ups are much less fulfilled than teenagers because of the pressures they are under and then discuss how contented most teenagers are, before coming to the conclusion that the ages of thirteen to eighteen really are the best years of our lives.

 

Upon reaching maturity people are expected to fend for themselves and this often leads to unhappiness. This is because most adults have rent and bills to pay, as well as a partner and dependents to look after, which more often than not, leads to them doing a job they don’t enjoy in exchange for money.  A recent study by Queen’s University, Belfast found that 79% of people would leave their jobs if they didn’t have a mortgage and 64% of people stated that their job made them depressed at some point.

 

On the other hand, young people are free from these worries because they are often supported financially and free from any real troubles. Most live with their parents who pay for all their needs and the only thing they have to focus on is studying. Research carried out by Cambridge University found that only 29% of 15-16 year old students said they were “happy”, but when questioned 10 years later 84% said that they were “much happier” when they were 16.

 

In conclusion, youth really is wasted on the young because older people are under much more strain when it comes to money and people relying on them.

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